Easy points does this sound alright?

i think it sounds good. a couple things need clarification. Sentence one: whos grand daughter? You could say the birth of my first great grand daughter. sentence three- This is terrible could probably be left out or added to the next sentence. Sentence 5. Who is Nanny Flowers and why would you just hand the phone to her? Than you talk about leadership being handed down. Leadership in what? the family? a business? and maybe instead of eldest you caould say first born male child. why were you arguing with Nanny? Do we know who she is at this point of the story? and the boat tying thing read wrong to me. I would have said she tied her boat to mine. THats just my opinon tho. OK so this terrible thing of a baby girl being born has happened and you argued with Nanny about it why> Because you wanted nothing to do with the baby girl? ANd if you are so wrapped up in this why would you have more pressing things on your mind and what would those things be?